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    dots Submission Name: I HATE YOU BITCH 2dots
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    Author: devil666
    ASL Info:    26/M/NewHampshire
    Elite Ratio:    1.63 - 9/50/38
    Words: 239
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 684
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 1465



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    dotsI HATE YOU BITCH 2dots
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    Those days of serenading, when I sang love songs,
    Now you're out of my life like a discarded tampon.
    Tried to make it work but you always ingored,
    Decided to leave you alone, to settle those scores.

    First time I held your hand, can't forget that day,
    Thought you loved me even thought you didn't say.
    Got an e-mail next morning after the first date,
    I saw it, my heart began beating at a fast rate.

    Told me, you missed me and didnt sleep all night,
    Looked in your eyes, kissed and held you tight.
    We made love, I remember you screaming my name,
    Now its cold stares & conversation minus the flame

    Deleted all your emails and burnt all your letters,
    Watching paper turn to ash, I felt a lot better.
    Now I dont miss you and feelings ain't same anymore,
    Wiped your memories off, like sweat on my skin pores.

    You were the one with whom I shared and confided,
    Too bad the feelings weren't mutual, it was onesided.
    Now I know you are cunning like a lying ass politician,
    Broke my heart like it was your long cherished mission.

    So I decided to end this agony, once and for all,
    No eye contact, no words, just stood like a wall.
    Realized I was nothing, just another shoulder to cry on,
    Now you got another scapegoat, I just smile & move on.




    Submitted on 2009-05-15 21:35:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      and i voted for you. poe
    | Posted on 2009-05-17 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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