Ritual by Raphael

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Submission Name: Ritual dots

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Author:	Raphael
ASL Info:	20/Masculine/Eire
Elite Ratio:	8 - 652/306/135
Words:	31

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	160
Average Vote:	1.0000
Bytes:	236

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I know I posted this ages ago but Id like to have it back on my page.

Ritual

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On the sleep dream precipice
meek and ripening sweat,
like complex oedipus
un-natural.

Thrice denied Peter before the cocks crow,
but I, my regretfull hand alone

will never stop.

Submitted on 2009-05-16 07:44:28 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is the kinda poem jesus would right...
| Posted on 2009-05-24 00:00:00 | by blackbird | [ Reply to This ]
  should a camel fall to the ground after having its throat cut and sport a prodigious erection that burrows fully into the sand, this is by no means love.
| Posted on 2009-05-24 00:00:00 | by InNoMood44Play | [ Reply to This ]
  terrible.
but I, my regretfull hand alone?

[censored].

you have no grasp on the English language but a firm one on your wee bits.

awful.
| Posted on 2009-05-24 00:00:00 | by SmellMyFinger | [ Reply to This ]
  I love licking my balls, so what? Wanna fight about it?
| Posted on 2009-05-21 00:00:00 | by Sethesin | [ Reply to This ]
  you dirty little girl
| Posted on 2009-05-21 00:00:00 | by leftof_red | [ Reply to This ]

| Posted on 2009-05-20 00:00:00 | by locutus | [ Reply to This ]
  Alright, so I lied...I am going to leave you a comment.

I liked how you used the word thrice to make you seem like some sort of literali.

Do you know how Pinnochio found out he was really made out of wood?

His hand caught on fire.

HA HA!!!

*slaps knee*

Now, c'mon...that was funny.

| Posted on 2009-05-18 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  hmmm ok i can't help it, this comments gonna have to be pun city.

It took some balls to write this poem and not be a dick about it. It sounds like youre wanking off but it never comes together at the end.

I suggest a soft hand lotion. If you're feeling extra adventurous something with scrub beads, ut that's a definate call for chaffing.

Seriously took some balls to post.
Cool to see sme peopl can take joke and lay hemselvesout on lines.

And somehow, tis manges to be agood poem.

I shall call yu the billy joe of es.

| Posted on 2009-05-17 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
  Who cares about grammar? Who cares about punctuation? Your words speak directly and un-flinchingly ), like your

'regretful hand alone' that will never stop banging at the doors of heaven.

My only questionmark would be about 'sleep dream prepice'. Why do you separate these 2 definitions fromthe point of view of the rest of the poem?
| Posted on 2009-05-16 00:00:00 | by expiring_touch | [ Reply to This ]
  I take you too seriously to get your wanking poems but as etheror says....

and as I say I probably never would have thought to see it that way, still

i think it's pretty bold to create something that can resonate so strongly and throw up a defiant wrist/fist at the world.

And i grow to really enjoy reading your stuff.
| Posted on 2009-05-16 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
  Good Lord, Craig.
Do you do anything but jack off and mess up grammar and punctuation?

jk, jk.

don't kill me.

I like the blend of Greek and Biblical.

But seriously... your regretful hand alone will never stop? Not ever?

That's a serious wank. I would assume you'd be hospitalized for chafing or rug burns or something...
| Posted on 2009-05-16 00:00:00 | by etheror | [ Reply to This ]

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