My Rebuttal -------------------------------------------
You like what you see do you?
These words I have heard before
From a lad just like yourself
Cocky and coy are your clothes of disguise
Inside I see what truly lies
Insecure deep within your core
You stand stubborn in your beliefs
Ranting complete nonsense
Flying off screaming to any who oppose you
I have seen your foolish kind many a time
Please stop where you are standing
I have no desire to hear your gothic banter
My ears do not deserve to hear such sordid language
I believe this is where you will label me a bitch
Now prepare to feel like the shit which you spit
Sit down son as I show you how it is done
Your beliefs in which you thought with your dick
Could not have been more wrong
Your approach is stale and quite frankly a bore
You have shown me nothing in which I desire here
With a mouth that holds bile and exhales disrespect
You treat women as if they are objects
Expecting them to bow down and lick your fungus toes
I cast you aside number one million and ninety nine
Watch my ass as I walk away
Now wallow in disgrace
Wow. That is one rebuttal! I love how it is done in such proper language, restrained yet with a maliciousness that would put any man on his backside! I would most certainly not like to be on the receiving end of that tongue lashing!
Oh, but what I admired most was your beautiful mind. Yeah, right. I never assumed the pictures you posted here were you, but if they are, I can imagine your having to beat off the dogs with a stick daily. I'll buy one of those shirts along with Mister Fizzle if you print them up! Dave
this one made me chuckle out loud. "beliefs in which you thought with your dick..." boy, does that describe a lot of guys, young ones 'specially! i liked this little rant of yours! i doubt he got the message, tho. hopefully others will. well done!
deep and thought provoking, i write raps and some battle lyrics and i know where you are coming from, its hard to control the tounge and i have been, in a sense, given a dose of realty, thanks for the wake up, check my poems and let me know what you think of my style, your opinion would be valued by me peace
"Please stop where you are standing I have no desire to hear your gothic banter"
number 1 thing I'd like on my t-shirt. Also I must say I'd hate to be on the wrong end of that. Although the walking away part probably wouldn't be to bad.
On a more serious note. The title of the poem suggests that this is written as a reply or response to something. It does a very good job of maintaining that feel throughout, and you kind of get the since that you are the one being responded to. Makes you just wanna back into a corner and plead an appology.