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    dots Submission Name: My Rebuttaldots
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    Author: Belle De Jour
    ASL Info:    24/Female/Inside
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 335/367/53
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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       Some words for the foolish ones.


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    You like what you see do you?
    These words I have heard before
    From a lad just like yourself
    Cocky and coy are your clothes of disguise
    Inside I see what truly lies
    Insecure deep within your core
    You stand stubborn in your beliefs
    Ranting complete nonsense
    Flying off screaming to any who oppose you
    I have seen your foolish kind many a time
    Please stop where you are standing
    I have no desire to hear your gothic banter
    My ears do not deserve to hear such sordid language
    I believe this is where you will label me a bitch
    Now prepare to feel like the shit which you spit
    Sit down son as I show you how it is done
    Your beliefs in which you thought with your dick
    Could not have been more wrong
    Your approach is stale and quite frankly a bore
    You have shown me nothing in which I desire here
    With a mouth that holds bile and exhales disrespect
    You treat women as if they are objects
    Expecting them to bow down and lick your fungus toes
    I cast you aside number one million and ninety nine
    Watch my ass as I walk away
    Now wallow in disgrace




    Submitted on 2004-07-16 09:42:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. That is one rebuttal! I love how it is done in such proper language, restrained yet with a maliciousness that would put any man on his backside! I would most certainly not like to be on the receiving end of that tongue lashing!
    | Posted on 2004-08-14 00:00:00 | by Watchman | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, but what I admired most was your beautiful mind. Yeah, right. I never assumed the pictures you posted here were you, but if they are, I can imagine your having to beat off the dogs with a stick daily. I'll buy one of those shirts along with Mister Fizzle if you print them up!
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-07-20 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      this one made me chuckle out loud. "beliefs in which you thought with your dick..." boy, does that describe a lot of guys, young ones 'specially! i liked this little rant of yours! i doubt he got the message, tho. hopefully others will. well done!
    | Posted on 2004-07-18 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow..I feel like I've missed something. You did this with such restraint that I just had to laugh and the fungus toes was a good touch.
    jan
    | Posted on 2004-07-16 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      deep and thought provoking, i write raps and some battle lyrics and i know where you are coming from, its hard to control the tounge and i have been, in a sense, given a dose of realty, thanks for the wake up, check my poems and let me know what you think of my style, your opinion would be valued by me
    peace
    | Posted on 2004-07-16 00:00:00 | by orpheus | [ Reply to This ]
      "Please stop where you are standing
    I have no desire to hear your gothic banter"

    number 1 thing I'd like on my t-shirt. Also I must say I'd hate to be on the wrong end of that. Although the walking away part probably wouldn't be to bad.

    On a more serious note. The title of the poem suggests that this is written as a reply or response to something. It does a very good job of maintaining that feel throughout, and you kind of get the since that you are the one being responded to. Makes you just wanna back into a corner and plead an appology.

    Nice Job
    | Posted on 2004-07-19 00:00:00 | by Mister Fizzle | [ Reply to This ]


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