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    dots Submission Name: The Rollercoasterdots
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    Author: heartless_
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 284/251/154
    Words: 331
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 596
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       i tried to write what it feels like, still kinda confsued probably will get edited later on.


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    dotsThe Rollercoasterdots
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    I didnít know that day you were going to call,
    Three months was a long time. I thought you forgot me.
    Now youíre here saying all you use to,
    Expecting us to be the same, but you had already left.

    I didnít know that day I would hit one low,
    Only to spiral up with hope and come crashing down.
    I didnít know this rollercoaster of us was to begin again.

    When you left three months ago,
    I thought that was final thought it was no more.
    I tried to move on put the hurt out of my eyes.
    You were hard to replace I even called him you.
    We didnít last because you I loved.

    Now youíre here and Iím wondering why?
    You canít know what you caused,
    The pain that ripped me in two,
    Tears ran down my face that even friends couldnít stop.
    Though you didnít care about that,
    You just wanted your out.

    So why is it your back?
    What made you see what I saw all along?
    I thought when this day came I would not fold,
    Wouldnít still love you but three months,
    Was not long enough for my heart to unattach.

    If I told you I loved you would the rollercoaster stop?
    Or would I spiral out of control,
    With you Iím up one minute to down the next.
    Itís like even love is not enough for us to get this right.

    Do we go back and try again? When we both love each other
    Or do I walk away remembering the pain you brought me,
    Why after three months did you have to come back?
    I thought I no longer loved you, thought I got off this ride.
    But hearing your voice took me up again,
    Only to be brought down by disappointment.

    I know you care, I know I do too
    But is that enough to stop the hurt this time?




    Submitted on 2009-05-16 14:44:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i don't know...can we ever really go back...

    starting over is a nice concept...but baggage just gets put into a different suitcase...

    so sad.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-05-05 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      guys are jerks who leave for two years then come back all "hey baby,oh i hurt u...my bad."
    then they expect u to be all trusting again and when u dont they get mad.im like"damn stupid boy how could u think i would trust u after all u put me through."
    | Posted on 2009-05-17 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow this is good. And I get where u are comeing from. Good Job. My bf left me 3 months ago and i understand how it feels to have him come back out of no where.
    | Posted on 2009-05-16 00:00:00 | by Kiwithegreat | [ Reply to This ]


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