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    dots Submission Name: My Brothersdots
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    Author: captureyourself
    ASL Info:    20/F/Sactown
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 42/61/52
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMy Brothersdots
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    Playing in the woods with our walky-talky's
    Bee's chasing us, I was stuck, you both were stung
    Playing in the rain, me, always tattling on you both
    Playing with the dogs, and your arm down hoovers throat
    Knowing that I'll always be your guys' little sister
    It makes me feel good, it makes my heart warm
    Protected and never neglected you made me strong
    I remember when there were only two
    We were seperated and things changed
    Even though we got seperated we still became intertwined
    Disneyland, the mall, and you never let me get lost
    My birthday, clothes and my princess wand
    Never have I felt so special
    If I never told you, if you didn't know
    My brothers, my world, my loves, my strength
    You are everything to me and more
    Words can never describe how I feel about you both, but I tried




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      you have awesome brothers. it makes me so happy that you realize it too. i wish i could say the same about my brother. this made me really sad cause what you wrote he describes the perfect brother!!! i wish i had what you had. dont let anything come between you and your brothers. i know how much they care about you and you need them.. beautiful poem i loved it
    *joez*
    | Posted on 2009-08-04 00:00:00 | by joezwells | [ Reply to This ]


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