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    dots Submission Name: Black Nail Polish.dots
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    Author: Theophilus
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 116/174/95
    Words: 239
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       my bro is into drugs and it really wears on us. but subtle little things like this, let him know, i still love him. always.


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    dotsBlack Nail Polish.dots
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    Sitting up in my bed
    Late into the night
    I should be asleep but instead
    I listen to the fight

    My dog lays her head
    Gently on my thigh
    We donít hear whats being said
    But we both know why

    What did he steal
    Probably just some cash
    Something to deal
    To get stoned and crash

    I wave around my hand
    Waiting for it to dry
    Placing the bottle on the night stand
    Trying hard not to cry

    I know it was his mistake
    He made the choice
    All night Iíll cry and stay awake
    Tomorrow I wont have a voice

    My black nails shine
    (At school no one likes that color)
    Ill tell the teachers ďIím just tired, Iím fineĒ
    But theyíll send me to the councilor

    He steals from me
    Heís always high or mean
    But that wasnít how it used to be
    Before we both were teens

    Or maybe I just didnít notice
    Maybe I didnít care
    Maybe ignorance really is bliss
    Life sometimes isnít fair

    Once when he was about nineteen
    He painted his nails black
    He loved me if he was high or clean
    And I loved him back

    My dad was really mad
    When he saw my nails black too
    My brother got yelled at but secretly he was glad
    It was my little way of saying, ďI still love youĒ

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      I cant say much, this is oneof those pieces of yours that just overwhelms me and leaves me shaking inside. This is real, its so genuine and in a sense it is also sad. You have a gift of expression and i believe from your pain you have crafted beauty, few people posess that gift, many would just stay down and cry. I commend you on this. It really has me thinking now. Thanks for sharing this.
    | Posted on 2009-09-03 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]


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