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    dots Submission Name: Beadsdots
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    Author: SilentDreams42
    Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 38/30/42
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       “Anyone can give up, it's the easiest thing in the world to do. But to hold it together when everyone else would understand if you fell apart, that's true strength.”


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    Stringing the beads of shame
    One after the other
    Making yourself a name
    A name to use as shade, as a cover

    Because when life takes its toll
    Remember your past, as it was told
    As you come to a fork in the road
    Remember your past, as your future begins to unfold

    This is when the beads of shame fluctuate, they hesitate
    Because they know your past too
    As your soul they simply desecrate
    But surely this you knew to be true

    So what shall you tell them in the end?
    Will you be able to carry on
    With the knowledge that they will soon descend
    Because they know the beads you have forgone?

    Why keep stringing
    When they already know?

    Just stay strong.

    They know.




    Submitted on 2009-05-16 23:40:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      great poem. i love the beads metaphore. Remember your past and stay strong. i love it.


    stay gold


    | Posted on 2009-05-19 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]


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