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    dots Submission Name: He/She never stood a chance.dots

    Author: MyWorld
    ASL Info:    21/M/IN
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 76/99/87
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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       A new write about an old feeling..

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    dotsHe/She never stood a chance.dots

    No choice at all was I given
    Due to the boisterous
    Poisonous way I was livin
    Thought I was coy enough
    To toy with what's all but given
    Now, I'm so fault-ridden
    For the loss, tossed, she crossed me and made the decision
    Without me, I doubt we, we would now be
    Anything near success, failure's all around me
    And, now she's goin' through with it to prove that
    She would know what to do with it
    Doin' it, all without me?
    Is it impossible that my calling, my seed?
    Lays in a landfill, a man killed, she did it without even calling me?
    Don't for a second believe that, I even think that, coulda been what I wanted
    But, the grief that, came to me slapped, me all around and I'm down, stunned it
    Kills me to think that coulda been my only chance
    I don't wanna be the one to wonder If I done an' put my life in someone else's hands

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