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weak


Author: joezwells
Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 64 /79 /55
Words: 181
Class/Type: Poetry /Broken
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weak



stress levels peak
body is weak
i kneel to floor
guts cramp, mind grows sore

puke from the pain
im the only one to blame
no way to let it out
no one knows what im talking about

so out of reach
the concept grasps like a leach
feeling so low
theres only one way to go

it comes up so quick
play it off like im sick
i dont want to do it
but my body throws a fit

how do i stop before my bodies doomed
its like a gushing wound
it just keeps going
sometimes it will happen without my knowing

i tried to tell, reach for a hand
every attempted ive been damned
my body cant take it
i cant continue to fake it

i need a solution
too many times its been my new years resolution
i want out
do you know what im talking about?

stress levels peak
body is weak
i need to find the answer that i cant seek









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  This was great... I've been there and now the scene and the emotions... and this poem mastered it bluntly but perfectly... once again it rocks
| Posted on 2009-06-13 00:00:00 | by LisaGullion | [ Reply to This ]
  wtf I thought that was over what are talking about bfffl...I'm right here by your side ...I'm right here listening ....I'm sorry for not paying attention, I miss you so much....I'm sorry
| Posted on 2009-06-11 00:00:00 | by captureyourself | [ Reply to This ]
  
| Posted on 2009-06-11 00:00:00 | by captureyourself | [ Reply to This ]


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