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    dots Submission Name: the things i want to tell youdots
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    Author: DiNoDaNeH
    Elite Ratio:    2.15 - 10/17/31
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Up All Night,
    Feeling the terrible fright.
    My throat gets dry,
    As I silently cry.

    The things you did in the past,
    Comes in my head like a powerful blast.
    The times you said that you actually cared,
    All those mother to daughter moments we shared.

    I want you to know that every tear is for you.
    Every drop of blood from the heart is for you.
    That every letter written with pain is for you.

    The pain that I face everyday is because of you.
    But I cant let go of any of this even though the day is new.
    I want you to know this,
    But I have a fear that you might take it as a diss.





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