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    dots Submission Name: Mixed Emotionsdots
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    Author: DiNoDaNeH
    Elite Ratio:    2.15 - 10/17/31
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 675
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 443



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    dotsMixed Emotionsdots
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    Confused.
    Lost.
    A mess not worth to clean up.

    Regret.
    Sorry.
    Why do I even bother?

    Clueless.
    Pain.
    My brain is filled with it.

    Nothing.
    Blank.
    I want it to be over.

    Tears.
    Screams.
    Not coming out of my mind.

    Why?
    Why?
    Why cant I find the right emotion to describe me?





    Submitted on 2009-05-18 15:30:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      So! I was reading this, and i wasn't tooooo sure about it, then i got to the last line, and a smile kinda formed on my face. This is a good piece because through reading it you can kind of feel what youre feeling, and when you get to the last line, the reader really gets to understand where you are going with it. I've never really been a big fan of the whole two words, then the explanation thing, so the only this i would have done is enhance the emotions you listed with an example, still i like this a lot.
    | Posted on 2009-05-19 00:00:00 | by igibson | [ Reply to This ]


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