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    dots Submission Name: Five White Casketsdots
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    Author: GoddessShakti
    ASL Info:    32/female/Fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 12/9/12
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 74
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 646



    Description:
       This is in memory of my family that I lost to a fire. I will always love them dearly.


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    dotsFive White Casketsdots
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    Five white caskets
    lying in a row.
    Three were so little
    The others not so.

    Out with the night
    and gone in a blaze.
    Tried through the night
    Though none left to save.

    The fire that took them
    Was fully at fault.
    With none left to blame
    My soul felt ripped out.

    Tears that won't stem for me
    No end to my grief.
    For the loved one's I lost
    The end was so bleak.

    I want, miss and need them
    Still to this day.
    And, keep them close to my heart
    so they won't get too far away.




    Submitted on 2009-05-19 21:58:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I loved this poem... very well written...the only thing was that
    The fire that took them
    Was fully at fault.
    With none left to blame
    My soul felt ripped out.
    kinda lost the rythm for me
    but this was an amazing feeling poem to me...

    | Posted on 2009-05-20 00:00:00 | by LisaGullion | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that the words were very strong, but could be stronger with the use of grammar, when i read it it felt natural to have pauses at certain places. That could just be personal, also i'm very sorry to hear about your loss.

    good write :)
    | Posted on 2009-05-20 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]



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