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    dots Submission Name: Eternal bliss - Introductiondots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 563
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
    Total Views: 644
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    Description:
       This is my first test in erotica.

    First of all every one should know that erotica does not mean porn/sex. There is a lot of difference between eating something and telling someone how the food will taste. The later is erotica.

    Also this series will be part by part as I need to improve on the writings every time. I would not like to insult the erotica type stories by writing crap which makes sex implicit. It is an art of portraying the feeling that one has as a natural instinct.
    Remember to comment at all costs.
    Blast me if it is crap and appretiate if you like it but do comment so that I can improve on this.
    Since I love school girls with mini skirts the story line starts at high school itself. (Yes I am a pervert and I intend to be that way. But unfortunately have never felt a single sweet kiss till date :-(
    )
    (Note: The story is split up to eight parts. This is the Introduction.)


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    dotsEternal bliss - Introductiondots
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    Our story starts with Miss Tina, a teenage high school girl as innocent as a flower can be. Cutely blushed face with skin as perfect as perfection can be. Currenlty she is 17 years old and has her body blossomed to the epitome of women hood. She is shy as she would not lift an eye towards a guy but not when with her two friends camila and Izzy. She feels free when around them and goes ahead and has some great time shopping and going around town rating a few cute guys they meet and making up love stories for each other. Both camila and Izzy sit together with Tina in the class. None of them to be real toppers to say but none are dumb either. They are what someone would call the smart ones.

    Two more months since the last final exam is going to start and Tina here has already had enough time with her books. She is having a great time but unaware that her friends have a biased feeling towards men and women she moves with them freely. Camila once invites Tina to her home for teaching her a few things on maths. Tina goes ahead and invites Izzy too to join her just in case she missed some portion.

    All meet up in the drawing table. Jumbled up books fly over for sometime and at last all swipe directly to the pages that are required to be seen at. Tina goes ahead and starts explaining the basics of the theory. Camila watches Tina with a cats eye gazed for the hunt for understading what she says.

    She gets a complete nocturnal feeling at the start and feels uncomfortable sitting beside Tina. She crosses her legs hard and is engorged by an inner sanctuary of thoughts and hromones. Each word coming out of Tina's mouth seems to be slow as if time just froze but desire just flew to the sky. She moved her hands to the book Tina was reading to bend it to see what she was teaching. In the move she touched Tina just to feel the sweetness of the time she was having. Izzy (yet unaware of her biased thoughts) asks Camila on what was wrong with her. Izzy just nodded off. Tina ignored all of what as going on and continues with her explanation. Camila at a stage gets completely drained of control and goes to the rest room for some time. Tina in the meanwhile talks to Izzy on the wierdness of Camila's behaviour. Both think that she was too tensed for the exams and requires some time alone to study. When Cami (nick name for Camila) returned she looked completely exhausted and Tina just brushed up on what exactly was there in the book and left the rest for her to read it. Camila was now in an artificial aroma of Tina. She tried to ignore her feelings but the fragrance of Tina yet remained in her thoughts.
    Tina and Izzy left as evening struck 5:00 and Camila was just waving goodbye but she looked at Tina yet with a grave thirst for more blood.

    Izzy was now confused on what Camila was thinking on and Tina our sweet innocent lady was going about in life without any concern of the environment around......




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