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    dots Submission Name: The Summer Sundots
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    Author: Frank Maguire
    ASL Info:    52 / UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 1727/1248/246
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 58
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 902



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    dotsThe Summer Sundots
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    Sun is shining far and bright
    With a calming gentle breeze
    Birds, they sing and take to flight
    With elegance and ease

    Clouds are few and far between
    Sunbeams fall around
    Silhouettes of perfect sheen
    Are dancing on the ground

    Flowers bow and sway awhile
    As the gentle breeze does blow
    Cattle roam a weary mile
    With the red stag, and his doe

    The little stream, it makes its way
    Through the sleepy dale and lea
    Heading out towards the bay
    For a union with the sea

    The bramble and the bracken sleep
    Such stillness in the glade
    Rabbits in their burrows deep
    Now resting in the shade

    Children play a game or two
    With an innocence divine
    Underneath a sky of blue
    As the summer sun does shine





    Submitted on 2009-05-20 19:15:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Exellent ode to the delights of a sunny summer day! Most relaxing and enjoyable poem!
    | Posted on 2009-05-21 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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