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    dots Submission Name: A way outdots

    Author: JonInk
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 6/11/8
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsA way outdots

    Art is my inspiration,
    Part of my re-creation....

    Tomorrow is a new day,
    Yesterday is on display,
    I found the words to say.

    I'm coming out in poetry,
    Scripted on a symphony,
    Where my mind is free,
    Where my eyes can see,
    A place where I'm me.

    Colours of blue, green, and red,
    Imprinted in my head,
    Columns and rows are widespread.

    I can see through the rainbow,
    These colours, help me grow,
    These words, I already know,
    Inside my heart will glow.

    Art is my Inspiration,
    Part of my re-creation...

    Submitted on 2009-05-20 21:30:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this poem... I relate to it very well... I release in my art work and photos too... it flowed nicely... but I do agree some what with GoddessShakti
    | Posted on 2009-05-21 00:00:00 | by LisaGullion | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nicely done. I have to say that the lines "I'm coming out in poetry, scripted on a symphony." really caught me. A beautiful line. The only suggestion I could offer would be if you break it up into stanzas, set them at the same line length for each one. like each stanza four lines or three. kind of helps with the flow. Nicely done.
    | Posted on 2009-05-20 00:00:00 | by GoddessShakti | [ Reply to This ]

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