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    dots Submission Name: What Luckdots
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    Author: UnderlinedInRed
    ASL Info:    18/f/PA
    Elite Ratio:    4.24 - 196/262/123
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsWhat Luckdots
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    All I ever wanted is to be loved
    To love
    To not be taken advantage of
    Was that too much to ask?
    That a man could think with
    His brain
    Instead of his dick.
    That he could care
    Enough to
    Not watch me cry
    That he would be there
    Make sure
    I'm alright.
    He could watch me sleep
    And know I dream
    Of him
    Watching me.

    You led me to believe
    That your stares
    Meant you cared
    That your kisses
    meant you missed this
    Instead
    You wanted to fuck
    For a mere minute
    What luck.






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