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    dots Submission Name: The 'Other's' (revised)dots
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    Author: Jessa
    ASL Info:    29/f/pa
    Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 221/209/73
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 662
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       This was put out in a while ago and I decided to change a few things, thanks to some good advise.

    Basically I'm stuck in a world that lacks common sense and integrity. People don't see people for who they are anymore...they're just looking for their own reflection.


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    dotsThe 'Other's' (revised)dots
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    I exist in the mirror where I am alone
    I exist within weight upon this stone
    I stand before you as flesh and bone
    Yet I only exist to those unknown

    Unspoken tears unaccounted for
    Know nothing of this path, nor of this door
    Yet I keep going, despite how much more
    Louder are the demons I choose to ignore

    Pulled from my home... my only domain
    Surrounded by difference, yet they're all the same
    No one can see me, for they know not of my name
    Diagnosed "Anti-social" for society's blame

    The 'others' keep walking with their plastic smiles
    Jogging high heels through divorce trials
    Happiness in a bag that's packed with denial
    Put on THESE shoes and walk for a mile

    For I only exist when there's no one around
    I only exist if I cannot be found
    Hog-tied and bound, buried in the ground
    I only exist when I make no sound




    Submitted on 2009-05-21 10:50:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow this is amazing beyond amazing really i soo can relate to this...
    so much so it belongs on my favs list you got talent keep it up

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2010-11-16 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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