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    dots Submission Name: Utopia dots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ohio State
    Elite Ratio:    6.06 - 174/189/127
    Words: 271
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 63
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    dotsUtopia dots
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    I know I'm rather liberal with my reasons for living
    but I've got one up on just waiting to die
    I fight against the current that carries me down
    I've got a one track mind, and a Johnny Cash suit
    wearing my horse blinders in the face of the sun
    I've got no direction, and no record to blame
    under the fog of everything built by mankind
    planning to cut into the mechanics of humanity
    and chip away at the stonework of personal identity
    until we are all nothing more than crumbling cities
    smoldering embers, measured by match-life
    burning down to final ashen nothingness
    anything is possible, and its all been done before
    its a shame we didn't stop to smell the flowers
    before all symbolism was stripped away
    from everything
    its too late to sell our names to history
    moneys run out, and we are sinking with the ship so
    I haven't slept much lately,
    too busy worrying for everyone else,
    who like me are going nowhere fast
    we all smile awkwardly to each other in passing
    like ants
    we keep on digging at our graves
    with belts, blue collars, and ever-present authority
    its a sad system we live in,
    built on the backs of the vultures
    and the bulk of disillusioned masses
    I for one will have no part in this constructed tyranny
    and yet like all cogs and gears in harmony
    I'm likely to play a role in every sad play
    that as society we've baited sins on hooks
    by embracing and banishing in one wide breath
    the whole of everything




    Submitted on 2009-05-22 01:28:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      smoldering embers, measured by match-life
    burning down to final ashen nothingness---

    Really??? This is... wow. I am so stoked about this piece it's beyond explanation. You have so much power behind this and it's all so well said, the metaphors are brilliant and the emotion behind it is so potent, wow. Very nicely done.
    | Posted on 2009-05-23 00:00:00 | by igibson | [ Reply to This ]


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