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    dots Submission Name: A what?dots
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    Author: MyWorld
    ASL Info:    21/M/IN
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 76/99/87
    Words: 297
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 512
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1816



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       All alone, one of a kind..
    All on my own, no one by my side..

    **I was a little fucked up when I wrote this.**


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    dotsA what?dots
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    I hope you don't flip a gasket over that shit but i'm askin
    If you could mask it when I pass this
    and you get your ass kicked
    by sorrow and sadness
    'Cause tomorrow i'll clash with
    Dreams and Ideals
    Things that in my eyes seem real
    Denial and the everturning wheel
    An endeavor to cure the yearning I feel
    And with whatever spurn you might feel
    Know I'm goin' for my hopes and dreams, my zeal
    Time heals, all wounds,
    but if eyes can kill, I'm doomed
    cause all i see from you is betrayal
    and I want you to say you'll
    come to me the day we'll
    reunite, and when you see me you might
    gaze upon a star, or lay eyes on the poor
    so, why not be all we can be tonight girl


    I've tried but my mind can't seem to find just what I'm
    Looking for, and what's more is I've noticed that I'm
    Severly impatient, a disgrace, and can't even stand the way that I say shit
    Time to face it, I've wasted too much time with complacency
    My mind is a waste to me, it's distaste for me
    Has led it to hastefully
    Be done and away with me
    erased, I'll be
    Betrayed, never should've stayed, you shoulda kept me away from me
    laid, I'll be, to rest with my hands on my breasts, the fate of me
    is dust, destined to be betrayed by one of me
    I'm gonna be dead either way, ya see
    So, fuck all your cautions, and false thoughts, my loss is naught
    I toss my old roster cause the costs are too high
    You're lost 'cause all too often, I'm scoffin 'em but it's all cause I knew I




    Submitted on 2009-05-22 04:54:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Bravo! I looked to find something no one has commented upon.. as I usually do when someone takes the time to read something of mine. And I must say this was a wonderful find. It put me in the shoes of someone else. Time and time again I search for things that I can take into my own life. This is something I can surely learn from. Kudos
    ~DearlyDeparted
    | Posted on 2010-07-26 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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