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    dots Submission Name: Sercuritydots
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    Author: Bloodlust86
    ASL Info:    24/F/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.1 - 56/49/53
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    You tell me you can deal with it
    You say its not gonna affect anything
    Your actions are saying different
    I'm asking myself if you really can

    Can you handle my depression?
    Can you handle my anger?
    Can you handle my happiness?
    Can you handle my fears?

    When I need you the most would you be able to stand there and take it all...no mater whats being thrown at ya?

    If I tell you I want to be left alone are you gonna be able to tell if that its when I need to be held and told everything is o.k or if I really need to be left alone?

    All these doubts and questions are making me want to call it quits, though my heart wants you to prove that my head is thinking insane thoughts.

    I just want to feel secure,I'm just not sure if you can provide that anymore




    Submitted on 2009-05-22 15:25:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      dont listen to him/her.i loved it.i know when things get tough and you are so scared.all you want is to hear them say they love you but your emotions keep getting in the way.my feelings are always in the way.im always jealous and inscure.he says he can "understand".but really he cant.poets feel stuff so much more than normal people.
    but its a good thing.without that we wouldnt have my favorite poet shakespear.
    i love his works.and yours is incredible.
    | Posted on 2009-05-22 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]
      This is how I would write it:
    [Since your title makes NO sense and doesn't exist, I shall appoint you a new one: Scarcity

    No pun intended (Scar city cause you CRY a lot)]




















    You told me you could deal with it!
    You said it wasn't going to affect anything!
    Well hell! Your actions aren't saying the same [censored]!
    Now, I'm asking myself: Was you ever able to deal?

    Can you take care of my depression?
    Can you take care of my anger?
    Can you take care of my happiness?
    Can you take care of my fears?
    Can you take care of me, for me?

    When I need you the most, will you be able to stand there and take my abuse... No mater what's being thrown at you? Fists or sharp [censored]?

    When I tell you I want attention, are you going to be able to tell? And if I need to be left alone, will I have to tell you then too? Are you going to be needy like that?

    All these doubts and questions make me want to quit, although my genitals want you to prove that my head is wrong.

    I just want to feel the security guy grabbing me; I'm just not certain you can provide that anymore, now that you've lost your job.




























    That is all.
    | Posted on 2009-05-22 00:00:00 | by pedestrianpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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