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    dots Submission Name: Secretsdots
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    Author: PanKavani
    ASL Info:    17/M/?
    Elite Ratio:    0.68 - 17/3/15
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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    dotsSecretsdots
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    Seeing this accident, upon all other secrets kept,
    I know you close your eyes to avoid any contact now,
    Replacing and revealing, just too much for us to heal,
    We can sit here and wonder why nothing ever blooms or shines,
    Nothing lovely ever found in this glorious universe,
    The gold of your piercing eyes, I never see they bloom awake,
    To still lie there forgotten is only your fault now,
    I will live into my present shades, I cannot provide you with life,
    It is something that you find that condemns every human's tears,
    I still see the wisdom with your every flaw, these mistakes regretting ever been mistaken as,
    To your final judgement, this continues on and forth,
    Even as I see the streams that stain the tone and the pain,
    I will await the day that you weep your entire life out, even here in front of me, just so that I can see, the desires you despise and the distant things that reached you, open your eyes, then call me a liar...




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    ||| Comments |||
      I wrote a poem inspired by this poem, I'll write it here:

    "You are beautiful by what you write and what you can't say.
    If beauty is all that matters then I guess love means nothing.
    Blackened heart in me, and a pure one in you.

    This does not change anything, I am still here and you are still there."

    It ends where it started I like that. Your words strike me as misery. I hope you feel otherwise, I hope you understand that feeling that way accomplishes what you fear and thought impossible. But I can understand.
    | Posted on 2009-05-23 00:00:00 | by MidnightSun89 | [ Reply to This ]


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