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    dots Submission Name: devils drinkdots
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    Author: joezwells
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 64/78/54
    Words: 29
    Class/Type: Poetry/Fuck it all
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       alcohol is the devil!


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    dotsdevils drinkdots
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    temtaion makes the soul flicker
    growing desire makes the cloudiness thicker
    sent of hell makes the body sicker
    how is it not known that the devil made liquor?




    Submitted on 2009-05-23 22:55:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wonderful message with great rhyming.. that's pretty clever of you.

    Quite powerful too in essence... Devil made liquor to ensnare and destroy the human soul.. Well Done!!!
    | Posted on 2009-07-04 00:00:00 | by Myrrh | [ Reply to This ]
      mmm short but its to the point LOVE IT. Is this about your past choices? And how hard it is to stay away from the the tempting things that had your attention back then? That's what I'm taking from this short write, its a good write tho I can see what you have written in my head!

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2009-06-08 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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