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    dots Submission Name: In Memorydots

    Author: PanKavani
    ASL Info:    17/M/?
    Elite Ratio:    0.68 - 17/3/15
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsIn Memorydots

    This light I hold, is unreal as, my heavy pounding heart,
    Those orbs I fancy, those orbs I long, part of that heavenly art,
    I yearn for them, I seek for them, in part for my craving hands,
    To shed upon, to rain up, the condemned ungrateful sands,
    Still my judgement, still my voice, I shall not permit farewells,
    That beauty, unexisisting look, awakening those worn out spells,
    Enriched small being, unpleasant surprise, are you jaded of this attachment?
    Over present, united morals, is this bickering echo my last consent?
    Fragile limbs, petite fierce frame, it is not in your interest to be saddened,
    You are life, you are glory, awaken me from this pitiful end...
    This light I hold, is unreal as, my heavy pounding heart,
    You are are my time, you are my gold, my preffered harmonious part,
    Take this artificial grave away from me.

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