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    dots Submission Name: Drama Holy Drama!dots
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    Author: eggshells
    ASL Info:    23/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 29/75/68
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 683
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    Bytes: 586



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       BADABADAdababada
    yea,,, this was fun to write!


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    dotsDrama Holy Drama!dots
    -------------------------------------------


    It's just the...

    Drama Holy Drama
    Of the Mamas and the Papas
    And The Baby and no Ladies
    But I'm not complaining
    About what I'm saying
    I just want to bring attention
    To this tension
    In my Brain
    Yes, this strain
    I Can't take it anymore
    About to fall through this floor
    Because of all this weight on my shoulders
    Now pushing up boulders
    And hearing the screams
    Of the other teams
    As they get ahead
    And then I realize I am just dead.




    Submitted on 2009-05-23 23:51:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Oh the llamas oh the dramas
    oh the insane lack of commas
    oh the papas oh the mamas
    oh the ala oh the bamas
    oh the southern gothic traumas
    oh the barracks of obamas...

    ...ooommm...



    | Posted on 2009-05-24 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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