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    dots Submission Name: oh my girldots
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    Author: Diablo Tapitio
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 85/111/62
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 624
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 470



    Description:
       song about my little brothers girlfriend who died in a car accident


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    dotsoh my girldots
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    Oh my girl, all my world,
    did you fall asleep at the wheel?
    or fall victom to your thrills?
    all my world, just to hold my girl,
    Untill the day we meet again,
    you shall remain my only friend.


    oh my girl,all my world,
    slipped away on that day,
    rain could never wash my pain away,
    all my world, id give hold my girl,
    everyday I hang this head,
    and hide away, remembering the dead.




    Submitted on 2009-05-24 12:52:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Nice ghost story. A real longing in it. Like the part:"just to hold my girl".

    Perhaps more "inside" perspective needed. But if this was intentional don't mind this comment.
    Overall really good, it's different. Good Job.

    "A Dog In A Suit, pass it on"-some white guy

    | Posted on 2009-05-26 00:00:00 | by MidnightSun89 | [ Reply to This ]


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