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    dots Submission Name: The Jester and the Guillotine dots
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    Author: Spin
    Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 72/101/84
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Jester and the Guillotine dots
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    Drone
    stones
    black bones
    from
    burning pits
    Fit
    slow sounds
    and
    gold crowns
    of the
    King's jester
    a dance
    joke
    primal poke
    a move
    too far
    in the eyes
    of
    his majesty.




    Submitted on 2009-05-24 13:21:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the free-falling form of this, the short lines. The words fit together well, and the stilted rhyme scheme works with the subject matter. Actually I noticed if you look, you can see a crown in the layout of the poem. Was this intended?

    Yeah, not really much else to say, but I found this entertaining. Too bad the King didn't.

    I don't think there is anything you could do to improve this.

    Bye for now:)
    | Posted on 2010-09-03 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]


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