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These days.


Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 129
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
Total Views: 660
Average Vote:    5.0000
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Description:




These days.



the sun rises,
and does not discriminate.
tears fall from my eyes,
for i wish it would.
i believe it should.

lost, so far from familiarity
how does this golden grass look
with someone other,
than my shadow beside me?
deserted all those who would follow;
i hesitate.
more i am unworthy,
to walk beside you.
to be known and untrusted,
i know so few.

this stream stretches,
for days upon days.
clouded and dirty,
with doubt and sin
from days before these.
i do not fear;
days like these will never end.
i left my soul behind,
days before this,
comfortably locked inside you.
before blood stained my hands.

I've been walking,
I've been crying,
I've been trying.
but,
i can't wash them clean.




Submitted on 2009-05-25 01:42:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Your poetry makes me think of dreams I had. I remember a lot of things I want to forget, but that's okay.

"how does this golden grass look
with someone other,
than my shadow beside me?"

Amazing!!

I'm just watching the sun rise now, I wish eveyone could see it.

Great work.
| Posted on 2009-05-25 00:00:00 | by MidnightSun89 | [ Reply to This ]


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