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    dots Submission Name: Your Big Picturedots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsYour Big Picturedots

    You hold the big picture
    as well as any frame.
    Your eagle eyes never land.
    Clarity strains your sight,
    gives you a thought hangover,
    covers that pleasant blankness
    in your mind,
    so your view is as a bomb target.
    Perhaps one day the field
    will be like a gunsite.
    Someday you'll look
    instead of see.

    Submitted on 2004-07-16 15:33:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      im liking this idea and i really like the line about the thought hangover...enjoyed it as always...i swear maybe im nut but i swear even when you smile in your pictures ...and seem happy your eyes still make you look sad...i know im nut...hehe...well anyways loved your write as always...smiles ange
    | Posted on 2004-07-17 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      Amy, I'm honestly not a very smart person. I just know how to fake it on occasion to mask the truth. I don't understand this poem. I really can't comment more than that. Sorry.
    | Posted on 2004-07-18 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      What helpred me understaind your piece was the war analogy- the little details instead of the big picture. Myself, I'm the opposite of this- I never care for the big picture. I am sadly surrounded by the people from your poem.
    However, this piece seems... dim. Too generic. Perhaps it's the shortness of the whole thing that throws me.
    | Posted on 2004-07-18 00:00:00 | by Raven E. | [ Reply to This ]
      i had to read this a few times to get (what i think is) the full understanding. some people only see the big picture and lose all the details. the more i read this, the more i like it. it just took me a few times! lol! it's been a long week, and i've been with pre-schoolers all day!
    You hold the big picture
    As well as any frame...
    i love that! and, yeah, hopefully one day this person will actually look at what's before them instead of just seeing... there is definitely a difference. very nice, amy!
    | Posted on 2004-07-16 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      i think i meant that they don't see the big picture... i mean, well, you can see the big picture but lose the details... anyway, i think i know what i mean, but then again, maybe i don't! lol!
    | Posted on 2004-07-16 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      wonderful read, made me think of a soldier in a war for a reason he only thinks he understands on his narrow need to know basis, please read my rap empty is phil, i think your poem and mine run parallel lines even though we are different in style...ciao
    | Posted on 2004-07-16 00:00:00 | by orpheus | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the lines "Clarity strains your sight / Gives you a thought hangover." Never thought of describing a headache that way. For some reason, though I do like the poem and what it says, the poems feels somewhat empty; vague. Like a person is talking to me, but she's omniscent. But I dunno. I'm just a kid.
    | Posted on 2004-07-16 00:00:00 | by Chihuahuii | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an interesting piece. How about- Leaving you hung-over by thought. "that pleasant blankness" that is so funny to me. I don't think it's meant to be funny, but I like it. I like the distinction between Look and see. Looking is deliberate, active. Anywho, nice write. Cheerio
    | Posted on 2004-07-16 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      Ignorance is bliss - but you miss a lot of things. so I personally don't prefer ignorance. your images are amazing but that's nothing new. the ending is great, holds the message very well. only one thing: I think 'oneday' (l.9) needs to be two words.
    | Posted on 2004-07-16 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      By seeing but not really looking people miss so much. He can see the forest but not each tree. He can tell you he sees a field of flowers but could not describe a single bloom.

    My ex was like this. It was hard to take. They limit themselves so much and walk around ignorant to what is real.
    | Posted on 2004-07-17 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]

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