Your Big Picture -------------------------------------------
You hold the big picture
as well as any frame.
Your eagle eyes never land.
Clarity strains your sight,
gives you a thought hangover,
covers that pleasant blankness
in your mind,
so your view is as a bomb target.
Perhaps one day the field
will be like a gunsite.
Someday you'll look
instead of see.
im liking this idea and i really like the line about the thought hangover...enjoyed it as always...i swear maybe im nut but i swear even when you smile in your pictures ...and seem happy your eyes still make you look sad...i know im nut...hehe...well anyways loved your write as always...smiles ange
What helpred me understaind your piece was the war analogy- the little details instead of the big picture. Myself, I'm the opposite of this- I never care for the big picture. I am sadly surrounded by the people from your poem. However, this piece seems... dim. Too generic. Perhaps it's the shortness of the whole thing that throws me.
i had to read this a few times to get (what i think is) the full understanding. some people only see the big picture and lose all the details. the more i read this, the more i like it. it just took me a few times! lol! it's been a long week, and i've been with pre-schoolers all day! You hold the big picture As well as any frame... i love that! and, yeah, hopefully one day this person will actually look at what's before them instead of just seeing... there is definitely a difference. very nice, amy!
wonderful read, made me think of a soldier in a war for a reason he only thinks he understands on his narrow need to know basis, please read my rap empty is phil, i think your poem and mine run parallel lines even though we are different in style...ciao
I like the lines "Clarity strains your sight / Gives you a thought hangover." Never thought of describing a headache that way. For some reason, though I do like the poem and what it says, the poems feels somewhat empty; vague. Like a person is talking to me, but she's omniscent. But I dunno. I'm just a kid.
This is an interesting piece. How about- Leaving you hung-over by thought. "that pleasant blankness" that is so funny to me. I don't think it's meant to be funny, but I like it. I like the distinction between Look and see. Looking is deliberate, active. Anywho, nice write. Cheerio
Ignorance is bliss - but you miss a lot of things. so I personally don't prefer ignorance. your images are amazing but that's nothing new. the ending is great, holds the message very well. only one thing: I think 'oneday' (l.9) needs to be two words.