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    dots Submission Name: Everythingdots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    18/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 440/401/163
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 57
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    Bytes: 780



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    dotsEverythingdots
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    It's too early to wake you,
    but I know I have to.
    Fighting morning battles,
    And all the planning
    And all our scheming,
    It got us nowhere.
    And every morning,
    When the day is dawning,
    I want you here.
    Just here.
    You were tracing an old faded scar,
    Asking the story behind it,
    I smiled and shrugged,
    "Not very important."
    But the scars unseen,
    That were cut so deep.
    Like the where the ocean,
    Meets the sea,
    Down in the depths,
    of a dead sleep.
    And when you go,
    you get a kiss and a hug.
    to hold you over til you get home,
    Where I sit waiting by the door,
    beside the cat but otherwise alone.




    Submitted on 2009-05-26 00:01:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Shame man, this is one of those pieces that gets you thinking and experiencing the same emotions that was written down, it is powerful what love can do and even more powerful the feelings that get stirred up when we are away from it. Good writing.
    | Posted on 2009-10-29 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
      "beside the cat but otherwise alone"

    my poor girl, i felt much the same as this when i was pregnant with you...

    you are not alone, my Precious One.

    (for one, there's that Baby in your tummy, that makes you two people or at least a symbiotic organism ala 'Dax' from Star Trek Deep Space Nine... and then you are my Spawn, which means i am always here for you. but please get your phone repaired, as i have not been able to get the bloody thing to ring on your end for over a day now...)



    love and kisses
    hugz n misses,
    Mummie
    | Posted on 2009-05-27 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]


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