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    dots Submission Name: I see you everywheredots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsI see you everywheredots
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    Rain slip dripped
    down the pane,
    rivered as it streamed
    I saw Your face
    reflected in a droplet
    Many droplets
    all mirrors of You.

    Then You shone
    and dried your own tears.
    Comforting Yourself
    in your own warm embrace.

    Later Your eyes
    will be full of twinkles
    Like the friendly, Wise Old Woman.
    And You will slide
    me down a slivering ribbon
    of moonbeam,
    afloat on the pond
    for me to feast my eyes upon.




    Submitted on 2009-05-26 05:58:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This one made me think some. Is it you seeing your reflection in the rains reflective droplets? I like when one thing can leave different readers to different interpretations.

    Well described and easy to read. No pauses that I noticed.

    Thank you for sharing!
    | Posted on 2009-05-26 00:00:00 | by Kuuipo | [ Reply to This ]


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