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    dots Submission Name: Home..I don't know xDdots
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    Author: LiChan
    ASL Info:    18/f/in my reality
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 9/6/12
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 780
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1199



    Description:
       can anyone help me fix this up, its kind of writen weird.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsHome..I don't know xDdots
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    Shine Shine
    Shine brightly dear one
    Don't Don't
    Don't Let go of me
    Shine Shine
    Shine like A star lover
    Don't Don't
    Don't forget me

    And here we stay
    And here we are
    Lost in a moment
    Of time and space
    And here we sing
    And here we play
    Followed by the fairies
    Who want us today

    So sitting we watch
    The little feet run
    We have had our time
    And it was quiet fun
    But soon we must leave
    The forest, the woods
    But one day we will return
    When our souls are reborn

    Because we still shine
    Even as our minds age
    I will still consider this mine
    When I listen to the wind
    For it is my home
    It is where we were
    Together in the space
    Where the childern run

    So shine dear one shine
    Don't ever let go of me
    And shine lover of mine shine
    Because I don't want your to forget me
    So when we leave
    Our innocene impaired
    Please don't forget to sing
    Once in a while with me.




    Submitted on 2009-05-26 11:31:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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