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Ghosts of Yesterday


Author: BCute
ASL Info:    30/F/MO
Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 1297 /1424 /373
Words: 83
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Emotions, how I feel about everything going on.

Scared out of my mind.


Ghosts of Yesterday


Wispy apparitions of forgotten giggles
echo down corridors,
singing of yesterday’s dreams
and tomorrow’s hopes.

Solid regret sets in –
a brick in an ice cold chest,
beats rapidly,
barely living.

Ghosts of yesterday beckon,
pleading to live again,
to forget the fear,
quickly taking hold.

Infections plague,
expecting the worst.
Hours ticking by like centuries,
until someone knows a fate.

Companions forget to care,
selfish desires overtake.
Anything that could’ve been support,
dies in apathy’s wake.




Submitted on 2009-05-26 12:07:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Well done with descriptive wrod choices.

I can relate to this piece. Mostly to the last stanza

Companions forget to care,
selfish desires overtake.
Anything that could’ve been support,
dies in apathy’s wake.

I divorced as a result and live more passionately as a result. Why do the aparhetic ones seem so cold?

Write on and live well!


| Posted on 2009-05-26 00:00:00 | by Kuuipo | [ Reply to This ]


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