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    dots Submission Name: Shaved Apesdots
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    Author: Spin
    Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 72/101/84
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    I pound my fist on this
    loaded life
    A child of evolution
    ignorance runs free like wild horses
    on the plains of Me
    shaved apes
    eat peeled grapes
    in stucco castles
    hassled by hunger
    free of need
    75 cents feeds a family of 4
    like quarentined Angels
    our desease won't spread
    blood red
    like our forefathers dead
    we will all
    answer for this sin.






    Submitted on 2009-05-26 17:00:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I don't believe in evolution. But really I feel I don't know exactly what you're saying here, unless I'm trying to carry the meaning too far, as I often do. Are you one of us rational ones who doesn't believe in evolution? I say this tongue in cheek, btw, seeing as how anyone who holds an alternate view is immediately branded as whimsical, unintelligent, or unscientific.

    Anyway, I'd be interested to know what you were thinking when you wrote this.

    Bye for now,
    Erin
    | Posted on 2010-09-03 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]
      wow.again.you capture something that is so realitly.
    i love how you write.its amazing.
    really.good.
    | Posted on 2009-05-26 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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