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    dots Submission Name: Deep passiondots
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    Author: totojane03
    ASL Info:    25- colorado springs
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 151/77/35
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsDeep passiondots
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    Slowly we run inside harshly shuting the door behind us as we lock it,
    Slowly taking off our clothes,
    And headed for the bed room,
    you carrie me.
    Both of us breathing hard with shared passion,
    the kissing getting deeper, and everything is moving so fast,
    The pace is hard to keep up with,
    Our voices are sure to be heard in the hallway,
    As it seems to echo off the walls,
    Soflty we kiss, as we hold each other through out the night, So many emotions fill the room,
    As I can fill you deeper and deeper,
    making love to me,
    untill we are both finished,
    Thats when everything slows down,
    Untill morning arives and yesterdays rain starts over again.




    Submitted on 2009-05-27 13:19:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very passionate and exciting! Nothing in the world is more intense than a night of lovemaking!

    I gotta stop and wipe the steam off of my reading glasses! Nice work!
    | Posted on 2009-06-16 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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