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    dots Submission Name: Our Angel.dots
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    Author: kellz
    ASL Info:    25/F/England
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 123/151/51
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 38
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    Bytes: 751



    Description:
       The poem I wrote for my nan's grave stone.
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    dotsOur Angel.dots
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    I'll take the good times
    I'll take the bad time
    I'll take all that I can
    Because your not long left for this world.

    Heaven has to wait
    we need you here
    your always be our angel
    even when your gone.

    I need some time
    because it hurts so bad.
    I don't know how to cope
    I just need to see you again.

    I believe your here with me
    watching over us
    keeping us all in line
    telling us off when we're bad.

    I know your ok and smiling
    we all miss you badly
    I hope you don't forget us
    I know we won't forget you
    because you'll always be our angel.




    Submitted on 2009-05-27 20:53:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      'your always be our angel' I believe what you meant you'll always be our angel.

    its good.
    | Posted on 2009-05-27 00:00:00 | by KimmyBoo | [ Reply to This ]


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