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    dots Submission Name: en massedots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ohio State
    Elite Ratio:    6.06 - 174/189/127
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 53
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 616



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    I feel the world as vapors
    falling through my fingers
    abysmal clouds of nothingness
    float on the milky way
    float my whole life away
    morning trips on the subway
    stopping nowhere
    reading the Times
    everybody is in and out of frame
    my mind is drifting with them
    shopping bags
    coffee, smokers cough
    and the uneasiness
    of everyone
    until the squeaking of the rail
    breaks the silence
    and snaps
    me back to nothing
    as the masses dismount
    and the doors clang closed
    behind them




    Submitted on 2009-05-27 22:35:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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