Hurt I Can't Control by DearlyDeparted

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Author:	DearlyDeparted
Elite Ratio:	3.56 - 101/112/82
Words:	109

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
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I am having a hard time....

Hurt I Can't Control dots

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I hate feeling like this is all I've got left.
These moments of confusion and complete anger.
I'm sick of the this rollercoaster love, twists...turns...ups...and..downs.
When is the ride going to end, and where is it going to leave me?
I'm not sure, and at this moment, I can't really care.
Right now... It's as if my mind, body, and soul are fine crystal.
One more free-fall and I might just shatter.
And all you've got are worms for fingers.
Trembling... fidgeting...slippery..and careless...
I'm comming to realize that unsure hands are not a good place for such fragile things....

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DAGGGGG!!!!!!!! this is the probably the best line on here in a looooong time: "I'm coming to realize that unsure hands are not a good place for such fragile things.... " you prove right here that the best write come fomr the heart and sincerity. i am trully impressed by the ability you showed on this piece here. i only have compliments on this one there was nothing that confused me nothing that left me hanging, except the end, which is what i want....

it made feel sad, mayb i might feel thats where i was at, and mayb certain things were my fault. it reminds me of a girl i once loved who couldn't find the right guy, and i couldn't find the right words and so i lost out... i'm not going to get into detail.... but thnx for this post it's touching, i hope everything goes well foryou...

| Posted on 2009-08-24 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]
aww so sad so depressing but yet another great write. i feel you and i have similar writing styles. granted its been ages since I've wrote anything decent nevertheless i believe that's why I'm so attracted to your things. weather that is the case or not this was yet again another great write.. i might be visiting your page here shortly i keep running into your writes like this. I'm simply looking at old posts and just so happen to click on your things and i go to comment and then realize its the same person as my last comment...

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| Posted on 2009-06-05 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

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