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    dots Submission Name: i Cry...dots
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    Author: StylerDen
    ASL Info:    29/Male/Malaysia
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 38/59/51
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 578
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       Honey, get well soon... :( im praying for u every moment of my life..


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    dotsi Cry...dots
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    what could i do?
    when i see you're in need..
    when you cry out to me,
    when you call on my name.

    what could i do?
    when i see that you're hurt,
    when you're down and confuse,
    when it kills me to live.

    i cry...

    my sweet heart,
    dont ever leave me behind,
    take me with you,
    without you i would die..





    Submitted on 2009-05-28 09:24:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sad but endearing!

    I liked the first two stanzas and waited for the answer. Good set up. "I cry" was unexpected but sweet.

    Not sure if you meant to use "confuse" but may work better with confused. Maybe I don't know.

    Thank you for sharing. Write on!
    | Posted on 2009-05-28 00:00:00 | by Kuuipo | [ Reply to This ]


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