Chill Looper by Raphael

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Submission Name: Chill Looper dots

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Author:	Raphael
ASL Info:	20/Masculine/Eire
Elite Ratio:	8 - 652/306/135
Words:	108

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	99
Average Vote:	3.0000
Bytes:	667

Description:
soggy tampon

Chill Looper dots

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Last night was full of shit!
The long walk pissed back to my appartment,
no girl, new numbers, grinding my teeth like this: grimace
Stuck on the side of a chatter chair with a creak in my neck,
somone shoving sprouts in my mouth-
that soft baby brain smattering on my plate,
Green God forbid we should drink of the chicken!

Nuggets on the brain, wailing, calling taxis;
and I swear I'll never get like this again.

Cry wolf where? I can't tell the floor from the ceiling and-
I'm just wondering which would be the more hazardous witch,
to sleep underneath.

Submitted on 2009-05-28 12:55:16 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
  this is an odd kinda write. (not saying it's a bad thing).

a pieced together madness? idk, i sorta get the feeling of a pub night, a bit of drunkeness, horniness, a tad of hope and then a despair of sorts. maybe a plopping down at the ol' puter just to jot stuff down. how a chair can grown under the weight of words or thought or figuring.

not sure if it's a soggy tampon. (kinda gross thought there). but...

interesting enough.
| Posted on 2009-10-17 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
  The middle section is bit tangled for me, but I imagine it's colloquial stuff that would make sense to locals. Other than that the imagery and mood is spot on, and the wet fart the wet fart talks about is the one his work would offer up if he put it up to be reviewed. This is to say that I imagine someone as small as him would be buggered on a regular basis, in the way and alpha male pitty will [censored] a young pup just to show him that he could.
| Posted on 2009-05-29 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
  another wet fart.
| Posted on 2009-05-29 00:00:00 | by SmellMyFinger | [ Reply to This ]
  I press my forehead to the earth 4 times and ask that you do not respond. Your response would erode the aloofness so inherent in your nature.

Hatma
| Posted on 2009-05-28 00:00:00 | by HatmaOnEsPoetry | [ Reply to This ]
  Whose nuggets on your brain? I thought poem was about making of an intercourse pale yellow skinned women? It is a balls cock poem? Respond immediately.

Hatma
| Posted on 2009-05-28 00:00:00 | by HatmaOnEsPoetry | [ Reply to This ]

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