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    dots Submission Name: ruined nationdots
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    Author: cor
    ASL Info:    16/M/NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.28 - 28/24/30
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 47
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    dotsruined nationdots
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    The cities of a once great nation in flames
    The scarlet stained flag waving in the wind
    The ashes of the burned buildings fill the air
    The powerful memorials lying broken in the dirt

    The people cry over their destroyed nation
    The homeless wander the streets hopelessly
    Lost in their own sorrow they march onward
    Limping along towards their assured demise

    Their conquistadors stare wordlessly
    Aware of what they've done
    Hording their plunder which they have stolen
    Beaten down the inferior people before them

    In the wake of the destruction
    Nature moves in to reclaim her land
    Erasing what is left of the ruined nation
    Expelling the peoples pain from around her

    The ruined nation waves its scarlet stained flag
    It's remnants and treasure quickly disappear
    It's existence is nearing it's end
    The flames dying with the ruined nation




    Submitted on 2009-05-28 13:59:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked it,it was complex.it was so real.things the people don't like to talk about,it was really good.
    you have guts.
    -rachel-
    | Posted on 2009-05-28 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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