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    dots Submission Name: This Lonely Nightdots
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    Author: Frank Maguire
    ASL Info:    52 / UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 1727/1248/246
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 88
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 639



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    dotsThis Lonely Nightdots
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    As he sits alone this lonely night
    His thoughts are far away
    Of when he held his true love tight
    In a long gone yesterday

    Her smile and sparkling eyes of blue
    Are so etched upon his mind
    With a longing he will always rue
    And thus cannot leave behind

    He wonders if come eventide
    Her thoughts are old and new
    Beside her lonely fireside
    Of his smile and eyes of blue

    He hopes that safe and well is she
    With a peace of mind to keep
    That her eyes still sparkle endlessly
    And her love for him is deep





    Submitted on 2009-05-28 17:06:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      There are no thoughts that are more romantic than those of a love from whom we've become separated. And, there's always that special girl who is a continent away that our thoughts constantly return to!

    This is excellent, and a great read.

    A suggestion; I think using the contraction can't instead of "cannot" in the last line of the second stanza (eighth line in the poem) will improve the meter of that stanza.
    | Posted on 2009-05-30 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Deft rhymes and great cadence!
    | Posted on 2009-05-29 00:00:00 | by bologna3 | [ Reply to This ]
      i love it.my bf has blue eyes..so yeah blue eyes.
    :)rachel
    | Posted on 2009-05-28 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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