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    dots Submission Name: I HATE YOU BITCH 1dots
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    Author: devil666
    ASL Info:    26/M/NewHampshire
    Elite Ratio:    1.63 - 9/50/38
    Words: 351
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1379
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    Description:
       This is a dedication to the bitch I loved a few years ago.


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    dotsI HATE YOU BITCH 1dots
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    Watchin sunset with you at seven,
    Holding your hand,felt I'm in heaven.
    Lovely damsel likes the love poems I write,'
    Her gorgeous face now always in sight.

    Want your heart cuz I lost mine,
    Months ago,all was well & fine.
    Lo came a cute fairy angel,
    Came,conquered & cast a spell.

    Black overcoat,sweet face & a dimple,
    Charmed me with words so simple.
    Beautiful fairy,is it a dream or reality?,
    Tell me quick before I lose my sanity.

    Every verse for youu my dear,
    Always with you,be it far or near.
    Never be sad,sulk or even fear,
    Hugging you like my teddy bear.

    Words comin alive,when I write for you,
    Beautiful face in the morning like fresh dew.
    Eyes of mine always longing to see you,
    Always felt this for you, you know its not new.

    See you once,want to see you again,
    When you cry,I feel sad too and feel the pain.
    Every moment of life,sharing with you,
    Love to be with you till the sky is blue.

    Sunny day with you by my side,
    Feelings shared,all we did was confide.
    Endless sea, we sitting at the shore,
    Felt something I never felt before.

    Hoped time stopped abruptly,
    Just me, her & the deep blue sea.
    But that wasnt meant to be.
    Time flew, it ignored my plea.

    Saw you the first time,my heart stopped beating,
    Life was pointless,you showed me the meaning.
    Felt your satin skin,now lost in your eyes,
    World now seems beautiful and nice.

    One look at your lovely face,
    Mind astray,I'm lost in space.
    Your eyes deep like a crystal maze,
    To describe them, I got no phrase.

    See the mole below your eye,
    Lookin at you, I ask why're you shy?
    Holdin your hands soft & tender,
    Well madame, I ask "Am I a stranger?

    Happiness nowhere,sorrows in a pile,
    All vanish when you glance or smile.
    Now you're miles away, we're far apart,
    Wish I could take it all back to the start




    Submitted on 2009-05-29 02:55:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's rough. I guess time heals all wounds though,.
    | Posted on 2009-06-12 00:00:00 | by nolram | [ Reply to This ]
      heartbreak is never an easy thing, and it seems that once they are gone you seem to love them more than ever before, but at the same time you hate them because you feel as if you've fallen to pieces. As far as the tittle goes, it gets it's point across but seems a little too much for how the piece was written.
    | Posted on 2009-06-04 00:00:00 | by Darkest Flaw | [ Reply to This ]
      And from the sounds of it, inside you will forever be sitting by an endless sea, longing for your message in a bottle.
    Painful read, not because of how you wrote it, but from the start I knew it was ending in heartbreak, and I love that feeling, knowing it's coming just not knowing when.
    Excellent write.
    | Posted on 2009-05-30 00:00:00 | by overthinker | [ Reply to This ]
      "Love to be with you till the sky is blue"
    "Wish I could take it all back to the start"

    I like the title man, very catchy. We can say that but us guys never mean it. No matter what we say or do, its always our fault, thats something girls dont understand, we blame ourselves for eveything and we carry it all.

    So girls don't blame a guy for feeling this way. He still loves her. ha.
    | Posted on 2009-05-30 00:00:00 | by MidnightSun89 | [ Reply to This ]


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