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earning unforgiveness

Author: joezwells
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earning unforgiveness

im questioned and doubted
criticized and contradicted
ridiculed and emtionally conflicted

i said one thing but ment another
i stood next to you
and flat out lied to your mother

what can i say now to take it back
i betrayed and disobeyed
honesty and trust is what i lacked

standing here now i got nothing to hide
im trying to mend all of the lies
im still standing here, im still right by your side

years may go by
i may never earn it back
wasting time making up for what i lacked
please just know i wont go back

im determined to earn it
mind and soul intacked

Submitted on 2009-05-29 04:19:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  BRAVO! relating to your work is never hard for me to do... you always seem to be so much in them... actually real... they come to life in my mind... bad ass
| Posted on 2009-06-14 00:00:00 | by LisaGullion | [ Reply to This ]
  kudo's this is an amazing write you got yourself. i love how it just flows sooooo well together nothing seems out of place or over used... very nice

| Posted on 2009-06-05 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
  If forgiveness is something your seeking hand them this piece. It apparently was written from a heartfelt place and anyoone reading it would be sincerly moved by your honesty.

You may have meant to place a "to" in "standing here now i got nothing hide". Not sure just a suggestion.

Good job all in all.

| Posted on 2009-05-29 00:00:00 | by Kuuipo | [ Reply to This ]

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