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    dots Submission Name: bullet to the head....dots
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    Author: suicidalacts72
    ASL Info:    20/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 189/150/69
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsbullet to the head....dots
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    like a bullet
    100%
    a fucking bullet
    straight to my head
    fuck i fuckin hate this
    i fuckin hate you
    your fuckin bullshit ass lies
    your fuckin stupid careless ways
    ANYone else on this planet
    especially as fuckin ugly as you
    would adore me
    and most of all love me
    but you
    fuck NO
    all you do is stray
    not physically but with your eyes
    you won't fuck me
    so all this pent up aggression
    where's my release?
    up your ass with your fuckin head
    you fuckin cunt
    i hate you
    i hate this
    so controlled
    i was an awesome person
    a party girl
    a slut
    i fuck like a pornstar
    and you ruin me
    20 and a loser
    not one friend
    i gave it all up for YOU
    and you can't even stay
    FUCK YOU
    FUCK YOU!!!!!
    FUCK YOU UP THE ASS
    how the fuck could you?!?!?!?!?!
    i showed you me...something i NEVER do
    emotionally
    naked as well
    how dare you say i'm not beautiful!!!
    i'm ugly?
    wow...you've got 7 years on me
    how dare you
    you fuckin old ass fuckin fuck!!!
    all this for nothing
    now i can't leave
    control freak!!!!
    help....




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      Anger, i havent read something with so much in it. not that i dont like it, but i think that there is no openmindedness in it. but at the time, when people are angry they dont really think twice.

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    | Posted on 2009-06-03 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      welcome to life... how does the test drive feel... you want the car... let alone the wheel... its all cool... you become stronger... you'll see [censored] turns around for the better... your normalcy in the way you express yourself in your poems is a friendly reminder that you aint slippin yet
    | Posted on 2009-06-02 00:00:00 | by oneinchman | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this! it reminds me of my friend an I think I get more pissed off about her situation than she does. (oh well) What you were feeling is pretty clear.
    | Posted on 2009-05-31 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      I tried to come up with a bunch of catchie sayings. It didn't work. The person, if they are real, has issues.........lots of issues. It is blaitently obvious you don't. Keep it in perspective, I'm 58 and been there done that. Your words tell me your in control. Good on you!
    | Posted on 2009-05-31 00:00:00 | by nsc | [ Reply to This ]
      I do appreciate the heartfelt in this, and I understand exactly where you're coming from, the only thing I'd say, is don't haste in your anger writes. Let them come to life slowly, make them climax. It feels as if you still aren't breathing at the end of this, and you really should be...
    | Posted on 2009-05-30 00:00:00 | by overthinker | [ Reply to This ]


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