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    dots Submission Name: Remember Whendots
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    Author: PiperH
    ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 253/299/172
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    Description:
       I miss him.... lol... not really. But I did lose a doll that I had an attachment to when I was little. I'm sure everyone can relate to this in some way. I'm not good at making people laugh, but I wanted to write a funny poem. I hope you like it. :)


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    dotsRemember Whendots
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    Remember when
    It was just the two of us
    you would sit next to me
    on the school bus
    we were happy
    laughing and playing
    you understood me
    but didn't know what I was saying
    the other kids laughed
    but I didn't care
    I was always glad
    that you were there
    do you remember when
    we snuggled in bed
    and talked and talked
    until night was dead
    you were always there
    when I was sad
    through thick and thin
    through good and bad
    I miss you a lot
    but it had to end
    mom said i was too old
    to keep playing pretend
    so off you went
    to my sister crib
    where she drooled on you
    like she did with her bib
    Do your remember?
    I doubt that you do
    your not real
    and i'm talking to you
    So my childhood is dead
    my innocence gone
    the dog chewed you up
    your all over the lawn
    but I will always remember
    my first best friend
    R.I.P Mr. Bear
    I'm sorry it had to end











    Submitted on 2009-05-30 23:44:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aww this poem is sweet! I like how the length and the words you use keep the reader guessing as to whom the poem is for - i first thought you were referring to a childhood friend, then to a lover, and then a friend, and then to a pet, and them finally at the end it was for your bear, its adorable.

    keep it up! and keep us guessing :D

    oh and ps, i think you mean "sister's crib", there's no apostrophe :D
    | Posted on 2009-05-31 00:00:00 | by EdwardScissorhands | [ Reply to This ]


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