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    dots Submission Name: Other Lovely Thoughtsdots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 451/419/172
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
    Total Views: 900
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 676



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       "All I see is dark grey clouds in the distance moving closer with every hour. So when you ask, 'Is something wrong?', ya think there damn right there is, but we can't talk about it now."--Death Cab For Cutie


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    dotsOther Lovely Thoughtsdots
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    It was only a year ago.
    That the colors started to fade.
    And my clothing decayed.
    I wandered through a cold wet tunnel,
    And when I emerged,
    I was blind to the earth bathed in the sun.
    I came across a field with no flowers,
    And I began to run.
    I ran until I all I felt was, all I was,
    All I am is another set of feet.
    I sat in a field with no flowers,
    trying to recollect all the moments,
    when I was dancing in the street,
    In medium to light showers.
    The thought came to me,
    Flowers and showers and other lovely thoughts,
    are all that keep us alive.





    Submitted on 2009-05-31 02:04:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      my sister.my muse.only for one poem but still you take what you can get right?
    its wondeful.i love dc4c.(death cab for cutie)
    and i love your work...
    <3:poprox
    aka
    rachel:)
    | Posted on 2009-06-13 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, this is a most beautiufl poem, sad, yet with a marvelous hopeful note! An excellent write all around! bravo! michael
    | Posted on 2009-06-02 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      This has the mood of a twilight dream; hazy and disconnected. But it has feeling and stirs the senses, and makes the reader feel vaguely that he's been in the same place at some time.
    | Posted on 2009-06-02 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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