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    dots Submission Name: Half Closeddots
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    Author: SilentDreams42
    Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 38/30/42
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 654
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    Description:
       its all in the past... so it should stay there



    but why does it still affect us?


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    dotsHalf Closeddots
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    you built me up
    made me strong
    every brick in place
    but my windows are still half closed

    you tore me down
    crushing all
    all that I held dear
    but my windows are still half closed

    what now?
    where do i go from here?

    i let you in
    you built me up
    tore me down

    you loved me
    you hated me

    you cared for me
    you bruised me

    ive done all i can
    but my windows are still half closed

    can they see it in my eyes?
    i doubt it

    but i wonder...
    will they still come knocking?




    Submitted on 2009-05-31 18:03:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The way I enterpreteted this is having feelings for an ex and wondering why those feelings wont go away. If that is what this is about, I know what that feels like. It's even worse when you have to see them all the time.
    Anyways, good write, keep up the good job. =]
    | Posted on 2009-06-01 00:00:00 | by xanarchyxdreamx | [ Reply to This ]


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