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Half Closed

Author: SilentDreams42
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its all in the past... so it should stay there

but why does it still affect us?

Half Closed

you built me up
made me strong
every brick in place
but my windows are still half closed

you tore me down
crushing all
all that I held dear
but my windows are still half closed

what now?
where do i go from here?

i let you in
you built me up
tore me down

you loved me
you hated me

you cared for me
you bruised me

ive done all i can
but my windows are still half closed

can they see it in my eyes?
i doubt it

but i wonder...
will they still come knocking?

Submitted on 2009-05-31 18:03:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The way I enterpreteted this is having feelings for an ex and wondering why those feelings wont go away. If that is what this is about, I know what that feels like. It's even worse when you have to see them all the time.
Anyways, good write, keep up the good job. =]
| Posted on 2009-06-01 00:00:00 | by xanarchyxdreamx | [ Reply to This ]

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