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Author: SilentDreams42
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No matter what I do, or how I do it, I just can't please you. I can't please anyone. Not even myself.


you fell from the sky
each crevice a different species
not one to tell a lie

no two parts alike
surely my heart
that is what you aim to strike

it overwhelms your soul
aching to share, aching to care
never shall it part, it shall stay whole

it follows you as you tread
through lifes obstructions
not once have you fled

when all is said and done
you do me right
as i do you wrong

"im sorry.."

its all thats left to say
nothing less, nothing more
i have come to realize
your expectations still soar

Submitted on 2009-05-31 18:06:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  steamrolling cousin. i likes this poem too much.

| Posted on 2009-07-16 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]

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