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    dots Submission Name: What can you do?dots
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    Author: dismentled
    ASL Info:    26/M/"South of Heaven"
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 625/583/217
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/What is
    Total Views: 833
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    dotsWhat can you do?dots
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    What can you do
    When you don’t
    know who you are?
    What do you do
    When you can’t
    stand yourself anymore?
    When everyone loves you
    but one glance in the mirror
    The reflection screams out once more…

    The world goes black
    you’re soul cold
    open your eyes
    they’re All around you
    Is that All that you are
    All that they see
    or something intermittent
    with a hidden meaning?

    What do you do
    When you don’t
    know who you are
    but the person you love
    loves you so dearly?
    they’re heart perfectly in hand
    close your eyes, and follow clearly

    What can I do
    When I don’t
    know who I am
    but trust in the love
    she radiates so immaculately;
    trust in the love
    that she holds for me
    …………………….
    So what will you do?
    What can you do?




    Submitted on 2009-05-31 19:35:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This one seems really conflicting to me.
    it's sweet but disparring,
    loving but questioning.
    I still like it but it seems like the very same tone I read from you a few years back whereas most of your writes have a more developed voice since then.

    I love you <3
    | Posted on 2009-09-12 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      mmm wow very deep my friend. I love how its like you cut it off and give us something to think about for example

    What can you do...
    When you don’t...
    know who you are?
    What do you do...
    When you can’t...
    stand yourself anymore?

    its like leaving me in suspense i just am dying to know!! I LOVE IT!! your style is different and I am loving it more and more I read! I can see you are perplexed in what to do I am so glad you shared its nice to know that we aren't alone in feeling these feelings.

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2009-08-15 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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