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    dots Submission Name: Addicteddots
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    Author: Ghetto_King
    ASL Info:    19 m ft. lauderdale
    Elite Ratio:    0.76 - 4/33/54
    Words: 298
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
    Total Views: 764
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1614



    Description:
       about a girl that i hate and so much but love even more i guess Im just addicted


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    She has me, this feeling that is stronger than any drug I know of
    Iíve fallen, into her rabbit hole, as I scream and wait for help to show up
    I canít stop I look for something to grasp then I submit
    Falling seeing memories as I continue my way down
    Smiling in a spectrum of emotions I am drowned
    Immersed in this feeling wondering why itís making me do things I never thought I would
    Addicted to the very conversation and subdued by words as if they were drugs
    Like I get a hit from every letter of each word
    The highest of highs and been on the lowest of lows
    But still Iím addicted hypnotize by your words like they keep calling me back for more
    Never did I think our encounter would have me like this
    She is my drug and her every action my hit
    Some indescribable force drew me closer to u, so close that you became a part of me
    This drug fills my chest pushing against my lungs making it hard to breathe
    Your voice soothes me and conversation are the gasps of air that briefly alleviate my suffering
    Yours eyes like faucets are my comfort, leaking truth that I see in your soul
    Your embrace is my strength, lifting me to a place only journeyed in dreams.
    As I sit here stuck wondering what she has done to me
    Addicted in worse way a feeling rehab can never help me quit
    Addicted to the way you make me feel I guess this is my fix
    Took 1 hit of you and love where I flew now I canít quit
    Addicted to love and this one feeling I just can kick




    Submitted on 2009-05-31 20:38:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Personally I believe this was a good piece of litery work.
    I love the way you make hte comparisons I've read many poems about people being addicted to and person before but i have to say this is one of the most impressive I've seen in a while.
    | Posted on 2009-06-01 00:00:00 | by Dhiamara | [ Reply to This ]


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